Title: When Hate Turns Into Love
Author: Shygirl
Link: http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/Shygirl
Reviewer: cuppycake@Candy Land
Title: 2/5
The title was too common. It wasn't very eye-catching either. If I was browsing through the list of fanfictions, honestly, I don't think I would enter this fanfiction. There are many fanfictions out there with this similiar title. You could have thought of something more unique & different to catch people's attention in reading your story.
Forewords: 6/10
The forewords wasn't that good. You should have described the characters even more. Or maybe write a prologue. It could make readers more interested in your story.
Poster/Background: 5/10
It was too messy. Especially the background, I couldn't read some parts because of the images.
Plot: 10/20
Honestly, I think its too simple and common. The plot is used in may other fanfictions and its nothing new to many readers.
Creativity/Originality: 5/10
Like I just said, it wasn't creative nor original. The whole story was about Yuri and Donghae fighting only, there wasn't many interesting parts. It jumped really fast too, like how Donghae started liking Yuri. But there wasn't much description about him liking her.
Flow: 3/5
It was boring at first for they were only fighting most of the time. I was suprised when you worte Donghae fell in love with Yuri just like that.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 7/10
There were quite a lot of spelling mistakes. Plus, you didn't put capital letter for the first alphabet of a new sentence. Here are some examples:
i bet your wondering why hate the innocent guy?
I bet you're wondering why I hate this innocent guy?
since we've started high school he acts all suffisticated, and mature like he's so special, but in reality he's a loser.
Since we've started high school, he acts all sofisticated and mature like he's so special. But in reality, he's a loser.
he flirts with girls to get theri attention and admiration.
He flirts with girls to get their attention and admiration.
i started to groan just realizing my next class was gym.i hate gym it's the worst class anyone could of invented.
I started to groan as I realised my next class was gym class. I hate gym class. Its the worst class anyone could have invented.
even a old sweaty guy with hairy arm pits looks sexier than the dude.
Even an old sweaty guy with hairy armpits can look sexier than the dude.
"yuri your crazy, how could you hate donghae. you know sometimes i think your from a different plant," said ayu.
" Yuri you're crazy, how could you hate Donghae? You know sometimes, I think you're from a different planet, " said Ayu.
Characterization/Details: 5/10
It wasn't good at all. There weren't much details about the characters.
Writing Style: 7/10
I didn't enjoy it for there weren't any capital letters at all. But I laughed at some parts though.
Overall Enjoyment: 3/5
It was overall okay, just that because of the background, I couldn't really view what you were writting about.
Sub Total: 58/100
Bonus: 2/5
I liked how it was from Yuri's POV, I laughed at some parts due to Yuri's sarcasm. It was funny how she cursed all the time too.
Total: 60/100
Playing With Your Heart by cutie1290
Reviewed by .flavored @ Candy Land (Ice San was busy so the request was paassed on to .flavored)
Title: 3/5
I liked your first title better. It was more eye-catching and was lyrical. But what do I know about romance titles. So, don’t take this mark too seriously.
Poster/Background: 5/10
You didn’t really put much effort in this. The poster, I’m guessing, is basically a picture and you used a simple software to put words over it. Even so, the font and colours you used blending in with the background, making it hard to read. You do know you can request a poster? There are about a thousand of request sites, though you would do well to pick a site that’s more active. Why not try i-DEAS or Lost Shadows?No background, and that’s fine. But why didn’t you change the colour coding? Is it laziness or that you don’t know how to do it?If you don’t know how, here’s a very good site on the html codeshttp://html-color-codes.com/ Please change them asap? I recommend maybe black and blues?Frankly, I don’t really see why this is included in the review of the fic… should be put under a general making scheme of ‘First Impression’
Forewords: 1/10
I’m sorry, but I can’t understand a word you’re saying. Even reviewing, I read through the forewords thrice and… all I got was that you were basically giving the whole story away. Is this a sequel? Because if it isn’t, it’s a really really bad mistake. This truly isn’t from me. Submitting my own stories for review has allowed me to compare the opinions of different reviewers and they all agree on one thing: Never. Ever. Give away too much of the plot. They might agree on other things like what extent is revealing too much or whether to put in character profiles and the such, but the above is a golden rule.Readers like to be surprised, as long as it’s not a bad surprise (like character death). So try to put a little mystery in your next fic, okay?
Plot: 7.5/15
This is… really sad, because your side plot is something that’s less common in winglin, but it was side-lined by something heinously common in winglin – romance. As you can probably tell, I’m not exactly a fan of romance. But it’s not the genre that’ the problem (I like the Twilight series as much as the next person, possibly more), it’s that because so many people write so many off-the-mill ideas without putting much thought or effort that it spoilt the market. And… seriously… the Mafia? I know a lot of winglin fics use this, but it’s not exactly realistic you know. Firstly, considering their nationality (I’m guessing their Asian), their dad would never get to be a boss in the mafia because it’s an ITALIAN organization, and these people are very bluntly, racist. They keep the trade in the family. It’d be more feasible if the dad belonged to Chinese Triads or at least the Japanese Yakuza. If my guess was off, and the two are American, still not feasible that they’re from the mafia unless they were Italian and then moved to America. If they’re Latino, then they’d be part of the cartels (which deals mainly in drugs). If they’re white, then they’re prolly undercover, or lowly paid goons. (Not being racist or anything. This is the general trend in the world). Secondly, the girls’ go to school while knowing their dad’s an underworld boss? Again, if he was really an underworld boss, he’d probably never allow them to be public schooled because as a boss he has a lot of enemies. And enemies hit at the weakest link, i.e. family members. Unless he wants to put them with bodyguards 24/7. If that is the fact, then if you write about one of the twins RUNNING AWAY because of it, then you’d have a way more interesting story than what you have. It’d also be a lot more logical too, because it’s a general unspoken rule that no one can leave the underworld. This is because a loose link could unhinge the entire underworld (betrayer giving names/locations/plans and the such). Nicole telling her dad she wants out… makes her seem kinda dumb, no offence. And the dad being so soft… how the heck did he become the mafia boss? O.o Sense this no makes…One more thing is that… in the mafia… it’s not really gangs… they’re called ‘Families’. I won’t comment on the romance part. I have no real experience and credit, so I’ll just leave it as it is and give you half for the plot. Although I notice a super lot of love triangles and rectangles and what not… Aish… why did you go with that sort of drama when you could have gone with the underworld related sort of drama which is less dealt with in winglin?
Creativity/Originality: 4/10
Even I, who am a romance noob, can tell that this plot has been used way way way way too many times. Only saving grace is that you tried to make it more interesting by adding the mafia into the mix. But in doing so, you caused your plot to have more holes in it than Swiss cheese (phrase doesn’t belong to me, belongs to Kira, a friend of mine). Anyway, some reviewers place way too much emphasize on this. For me, this is only important when you’re writing skills are barely up to master, and you need an interesting plot to attract readers. If the writer is good, then this really shouldn’t matter. But, very bluntly, you aren’t, at least in my book. Hence the low score.
Flow: 4/10
In terms of plot peak to plot peak, it’s fine.But individual chapters were ultra slow. Seriously, no one wants to see a whole block of useless events like Hannah having a whole long conversation to get out of a car. From what I get from Hannah’s character, wouldn’t it be better if she just jumps out without any extra explanation? And some parts you don’t need to include, like Nicole meeting Hannah, they say “hi”, and asking what class (oh, 2-C? oh, really? Haha, I’m in 2-A). Really, not important. Get to main point, i.e. since its script style, combine!
Like this:
[From Chapter 2]
Hannah (Walks over to twin): Here we go…
Nicole (jabbers): Okay, your class is 2-C. We’re not in the same class, sadly, cos some1 flunked her entrance exams so badly…
Hannah (glares): I didn’t flunk. I just didn’t do as well as u.
Nicole: Well, duh I'm smarter. I'm in 2-A. Just come over if u need anything, ok... And don’t get into trouble!
Hannah: Yeh, sure. w/e (rolls her eyes and tries to walk away when Nicole pulls her back) WHAT?!
Nicole: Ssh! (covers her twin’s mouth while waving people off) What’s with u and shoutin in public? I mean it when I said don’t get into trouble! And don’t skip class! Or I’m telling Dad! And rmb what he said if you did that?
Hannah: That I won’t be the new boss. W/e. Ciao.
(Walks off before Nicole can contradict)
Nicole: Aish… that girl.
(Scene change)
(Hannah walking aimlessly accidentally bumps into someone)
etc…
Anyway, my point is, it’d be a lot more succinct that way.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 0/10
You already said you’d be writing with ‘txting spelling’ so I won’t grade your spelling.However, you should have said you wrote in ‘txting STYLE’, because that’s basically what this is. There’s no real sentence or paragraph structure or sense of tense here. Not even a script style sense of grammar, let alone novel style And so I’m going to mark you down really badly. I’m a stickler for this sort of thing, so I apologize if this seems harsh.
Characterization: 5/10
You put all your character profiles in the first chapter. Some reviewers like that, and there is nothing wrong with it. I, myself and only speaking for myself, just don’t like it. I prefer that the character’s character is revealed through the writing. Nothing exactly wrong with the way you wrote the characters, it’s just that… again, like the plot. There’s a lot of plot holes. Like Nicole being so nice? Really doesn’t make sense unless she’s been coddled. But then she wouldn’t have been made to learn how to fight, yeah? Unless you can explain it properly since the beginning, please go for more extreme characters at first before showing different sides of him and her.
Writing Style: 4/10
Firstly, my opinion is that novel style is better than script style though the latter has its perks. But as long as it’s good, I don’t care.But this is… not good to say the least… It got a little more bearable when it got to the script style, because, at least, I could decipher the individual words, and at least, no matter how you want to mess up speech, you can’t…Even if you want to write in script form and in sms text spelling, it should at least look something like this:
[From Chapter 1]
Nicole (waiting for Hannah in the living room): Hannah, hurry up! Hannah: How many times should I tell you that I'm not going! Go ahead w/out me! You'll be late...
Nicole: Yah! U are cuming w me! U haven't been to the new school at all! Even on the first day! And now it's fri which it was like, 4 days ago since we just moved to our new skool!!! If you don't come, I'll tell Dad!!!
Hannah: AH! FINE!!! U win! I'm coming! (grudgingly)
(Hannah wears changes out of her PJ's into her uniform and comes down)
Frankly, if you can get rid of this habit, it’d be even better. This style is something one should never get used to. This is something I would actually preferably see:
Nicole was waiting in the living room for Hannah, tapping her foot impatiently. Finally, unable to stand waiting any longer, she hollered up to her twin of sixteen years. “Hannah! Hurry up!”
There was a muffled reply, as if her violent twin was shouting down through the pillow. It was quite a feat since Nicole could hear every word quite clearly. “How many times do you want me to tell you: I’M NOT GOING!”
Nicole rolled her eyes and persistent. “Yah! You haven’t been to the new school at all! You even missed the first day! And now it’s already Friday! Four WHOLE DAYS since we moved here!”
“I don’t care! Go without me! You’re going to be late!” the reply was clearer now, as if the speaker had finally gathered enough energy to lift her head off the pillow.
Nicole grinned, it seemed like she was getting some headway. If Hannah was really against going to school today, she wouldn’t have bothered replying. Nicole decided to play her trump card. “If you don’t come, I’ll tell Dad!”
There was a pause, as if Hannah was trying to call Nicole’s bluff. Nicole shook her head before shouting again. “I mean it! Come down this instant!”
“Yah! FINE!” Hannah finally relented, much to Nicole’s wry amusement. “I’m coming! Just let me change into this stupid uniform!”
A minute later, Hannah came tumbling down the stairs like an untamed typhoon, her shirt crinkled, and skirt pulled up extra high. Seeing Nicole’s wide grin, she scowled. “Don’t think it’s because of you that I’m going to school.”
Nicole’s grin only grew. Hannah’s scowl became sour. “I really only want to go to see if there’s any dudes worth fighting.”
“I believe you.”
“Shut up.”
That was only an example. You can not follow it this way, but I feel that the novel style has a better ability to convey more to the audience.
Also, I have a slight problem with you using so pictures to show what accessories/clothes that the characters are wearing. Mostly, it’s the practicality of it: would the casual reader actually take the time to copy and paste just to see how a bag (with not real contribution to the plot) looks like. And this is winglin, so there’s no one-click link, and that means the probability of the readers looking at the link is a bare borderline after zero.
I know you’re doing this so as to show the character’s personality, but there are better and more productive ways of doing this. You don’t even need to do description. For script style, the best way is to create individual ways of talking. For example, for Hannah, you could used a more rough style of speech akin to hip hop style talking (i.e. Yo; dude: whatcha) while for Nicole, something more feminine (i.e. no strong swear words, include gasping, disapproval, naggy).
Overall Enjoyment: 1/5
This has nothing to do with your fic. Firstly, I’m not fond of romance. Secondly, I prefer the novel style. Thirdly, there were too many irrelevant and useless things in your fic. Fourthly, there was no grammar sense whatsoever. So… I really didn’t enjoy this… sorry.
Bonus: 0/5
Total: 34.5/100
Spread Your Wings by Star- Chan
Reviewed by Cuppycake @ Candy Land
http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/SCwings
Title: 4/5
The title wasn't very eye-catching. If I was browsing through the list of fanfictions, honestly, I don't think I would enter this fanfiction. But the title matched the story very well though. It gave the readers a slight feel of what the story was going to be about.
Poster/Background: 9/10
I personally loved the poster & background. It matched the storyline very well. The poster also gave the readers a slight idea that this fanfiction was going to be sad. The background eas simple but nice, for it had the main female character's favourite butterfly on it.
Forewords: 8/10
I like how you wrote a prolouge in your forewords. It was short but it kind of gave off what the whole story was going to be about. I would prefer it if you wrote it a little more mysterious. That way, readers would be wondering what the story was all about.
Plot: 12/15
I've never read this type of story before. It was different from other stories. But, it was quite boring for it didn't have any happenings that would make readers want to read more. You could have wrote some happenings that was exciting, so that readers wouldn't get bored reading it. You didn't really write how the two main characters fell in love. Like how they felt about each other. Your storyline was lack of that.
Creativity/Originality: 7/10
I'll say this story is very original. I love that no one has wrote this type of storyline before. Its original but not very creative though. Writtings more happenings may bring more marks for creativity, but like I said, there wasn't much happenings in the whole story.
Flow: 8/10
The flow was great. Not too fast nor too slow. Just moderate. It was perfect!
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 10/10
There wasn't any spelling or grammar mistakes in your whole story. Your vocabulary wa good as well. It was great! 10 out of 10.
Characterization: 6/10
You never described the characters very detailedly. I didn't quite understand the two main characters' personalities in the whole story. You could have described them slightly more.
Writing Style: 9/10
I really loved your writting style. It was great and easy to understand. There were enough details for every part of the story and it was simple at the same time very detailed.
Overall Enjoyment: 3/5
If there were more happenings in the story, I think I would have enjoyed the whole story even more. But I think it was quite good. Keep up the good work!
Bonus: 4/5
Bonus on your poster & background. I liked that it fit the whole storyline well. The colours are nice and plain too.
Total: 80/100
Meeting U by Dani
Reviewed by SaMaNtHa @ Candy Land
http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/RyeowookLover4
Title: 2/5
Well since its a on going story I don't know if the title's appropriate for the story. I gave you some points because I am reading some things that might point to the title. But never know!
Poster/Background: 10/10
I liked the poster and bg. It was pretty, it included all your characters but not the fic girl so next time the girl should be on it. The poster gave a feel of what the story was going to be about so it was good! The font was also easy to read. But I think the bg was a little plain, there was Jaejoong's face on it but it should of had the title on it.
Forewords: 5/10
I'll give you half point for this section, because you didn't add a plot/prologue! Its very important to do so because it helps you attract your readers! Its the hook of your story! I gave you half point because you told the readers about the characters, you gave us their names and listed off what they're roles were and also listed their personalities! And you also gave an authors note.
Plot: 5/15
To be honest I read more than enough of these stories. The plot is cliché and also predictable. Stories like yours the girl will end up with the guy which is Jaejoong in your fic, there would also be trouble between him and Rain, it goes on and on. So I'll have to give you only some points.
Creativity/Originality: 5/10
Like I said on the plot, I don't think its original or creative. I'm giving you half point because of how your using the story line. Its a over used storyline but you make it interesting by adding conflicts and I like conflicts because not all stories are happy stories!
Flow: 8/10
I thought ths flow was kind of fast at times but other than that I thought it was good. You did a great job at lengthening the time line for your readers so that was well done.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 8/10
I saw some small mistakes here and there. The grammar, there were also some mistakes. I think you were writing and didn't type a certain word so the sentence was weird. So re read and fix your mistakes. The vocabulary was basic! You need to expand your vocabulary. But it'll only help if you understand them! So fixing these mistakes will help you approve.
Characterization: 7/10
I thought you did okay in this section. Since you have a lot of characters you didn't really have time to give us information about all of them. I mostly only know about the fic girl, Rain, and Jaejoong but the rest I don't really know what their personalities are about.
Writing Style: 8/10
Your writing was neat and understandable. But I think you add too much dialogue. Theres more dialogue than writing, itself. You should write more than writing dialogue because it'll help you give the readers more information about the setting and whats happening in the story.
Overall Enjoyment: 3/5
I didn't enjoy it much because it was a predictable plot.
Bonus: 5/5
I hope you don't get discouraged by my reviewing but be ENcourage and work harder!
Total: 66/100
Free Your Mind by BangumGD
Review by .flavored @ Candy Land
Title: 3.5/5
Interesting title. Though not exactly eye-catching. I suppose I can draw some loose links as to how your title relates to your story, but nothing definite so far.
Poster/Background: 7/10
=D Pretty XD Though, it’s pink. Lolz. Which is stereotypically a feminine colour, and yet the main female character is a more sporty type. Would have prefer maybe… a soft sky blue? It’d be consistent with your title as blue is the colour of the sky and symbolizes freedom. But all that said, I still like it, and I can read the story easily because of the good contrast between words and background. =D
Forewords: 9/10
Smart way of using the newspaper article XD Tells us what the plot is about succinctly and also the possible turmoil that the main character might face. =D
Plot: 10/15
… Some odd parts.
Firstly. In Chapter 9… how did Chase get her hands on the stove just by turning around? O.o That was plain weird. … oh. I think I sort of get it… still… it’s not written that well. Lolz XD
Another weird things is why the newspaper didn’t report Chase’s sex. Nor did they use her full name Chasen. That’s a little odd because newspapers usually do that.
Well, I suppose it’s fine? No real feelings for the plot though.
Creativity/Originality: 8/10
Hmm… I can’t really be the judge about this because I rarely read romance fics. Well, I’d say it’d be half-half. Not exactly creative in the sense that if I throw a stone in winglin, there’d be a 99% chance I’d hit a story that also involves an exchange student and a bunch of guys. Creative/original in the sense that it’s an American exchange student going into a Korean school because of a scandal. Then again, maybe there’re other fics like this. I wouldn’t know. XD
Then again, I don’t really care if the plot is original or not. As long as it’s written well, which your fic is… quite. So, I’m not taking off much points from this.
Flow: 6/10
A little slow. Then again, the chapters are quite short (for me, not for the rest of the winglin population XD Long chapters for me are about 14-15 pages on word). So I suppose it’s fine? Still, it did take you a while to get to the main story. 4-5 chapters? And two chapters for a football game… hmm… Not that I fell asleep. Just felt a lot of things didn’t exactly contribute to the plot. Like the details though.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 8/10
Spelling no problem. Grammar… there’s some odd grammarisation at some parts, but it’s mostly fine. Your vocab is sometimes a bit odd too… But no big problems. =D
… still one small point. In chapter 9, somewhere in the middle after Chase burns her hand…
‘The other boys left except Taecyeon who stayed behind to help cook the now injured Chase.’
O.o Taecyeon was helping to cook Chase? Are they cannibals or something? XD Haha, should be something like: ‘The other boys left except Taecyeon, who stayed behind to help the now injured Chase to cook.’
Characterization: 6/10
Chase is written quite well, but other than that, the rest of the characters are bit… bland? (Okay, fine. I can Taecyeon was cute too XD)You didn’t exactly bring out the individual points that well, and you only have 8-9 so called main characters (so called because not all of them appear that much). I have seen people handle over 40 and still be able to do it well. Something you need to improve on.
One more thing you need to do is to constantly drop details on the character appearance. This will help differentiate them.
For example, ‘Tacyeon had a sparkle in his mischievous brown eyes.’ Or something.
Writing Style: 7/10
It’s VERY American. XD A lot of phrases I wouldn’t have really understood if I hadn’t read some American novels before. No real problem with that, just that a lot of the readers in winglin are from
Other than that, your writing style is fine. Not script, which is good. Long enough sentence. Punctuation mostly in the right place. =P But quite a common style if you must. But no real problem.
Overall Enjoyment: 3/5
Sorry. Not a romance junkie. And the plot was a bit too slow for my liking. And… nothing very inspiring that made me want to write a romance fic too. So yeah. Sorry, that’s just me. =P
=P But it’s good enough not to make my head throb in pain and want to give you super low marks. So, you know that’s good =D
Bonus: 3/5
1. English isn’t your first language, but you write a lot better than some whose English IS their first language *bows* 2. You didn’t cause my eyes to bleed. 3. My brain didn’t zone out. Actually managed to read this pretty well. XD Yeah, I’m like that with romance. XD
Total: 70.5/100
#1 The Last Petal (Reviewed by Arronyans)
The Last Pedal
A Silly Production
http://www.winglin.net/fanfic/asp_02/
Title: 5/5
I love the title! It seems to fit the story because of Ella is the “last” of the Chen Family. It caught my attention. And your online name also caught my attention (that's not why I gave you full points...) but it's good!
Poster/Background: 9/10
I like your poster/BG but, I don't like Wu Chun's picture. I don't know, maybe it's because I don't like Wu Chun as much as the other Fahrenheit members; I feel like his picture is a problem. But I'm in love with the BG! To tell the truth, I'm rather into BG than the actual poster. Maybe I'm just weird like that. And you said that you took the picture of the flower yourself? I love that picture! It's so pretty! Although I didn't see the old BG and poster, I do like this one.
Forewords: 10/10
You gave a brief summary of the past and present and a sentence or two about the main characters. And you also have a warning! I wish I thought of that when writing my story, because everyone comes to me and say, “Why are you so cruel and hurting ___?!” That warning prevents those kinds of comments.
Plot: 11/15
I like your story, but I feel like the scenes are a little rushed and I get confused a bit. Like the part that Charlene got pregnant. How did they know that she was already 4 months pregnant? But anyway, it's unique how she's the last “pedal” of the Chen family, but then again, how could she pass on the family name if she's a girl? Usually when married, the woman could add her last name to her husband's last name (Pitt-Jolie/Jolie-Pitt) but even though the girl have a kid, her kid's name is still the name of her husband's last name, right?
Creativity/Originality: 8/10
I actually like the fact that Ella has an “illness” or she's kind of “crazy-like” for some parts because it's not common at all in fanfics (well, at least in those that I read and know of...). But some parts are very common, such as one of the main characters have a cold shoulder and the other doesn't, just this time, it's the girl with the coldness.
Flow: 8/10
I said before that I thought some parts were a little rushed. Like the part when you revealed that the teacher was Ella's dad and that's she's scared of hospitals. In my head, I was like, “WHY DID SHE REVEAL MENG ALREADY!” because I thought that Ella's dad was going to get exposed around the ending. But it's okay if I look over the whole story. And your replies tot he readers kind of gave away some things (she had a sickness, and she was afraid of hospitals, etc.)
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 8/10
In some sentences, you were missing some words. In chapter 13, Ella said, “Tell me exactly why you me.” It could've been “Tell me exactly why you want/need me.” Also, there were some spelling mistakes. But that's most of the problems that were in your writing.
Characterization: 8/10
I personally dislike Ella's character in the beginning because she's so dark (you get what I mean, right?)! I don't like stories when the main girl is the one with the cold shoulder; I think it's just a little common for the guy to be “colder” than the girl. But that's just me. I love Wu Chun's character, and that's what kept me reading (other than the fact that it's a CE fanfic) because, like I said before, I don't really like the real Wu Chun. And Charlene's character get on my nerves and if she wasn't there, Wu Chun would've already went for Ella!!
Writing Style: 8/10
It's clean and neat, but the whole right side it of the screen is blank, revealing the BG. And also, I prefer reading in 4-6 sentences vs. 1-2 sentences paragraphs. I just think that it's a little more novel-like style.
Overall Enjoyment: 5/5
I love your story! That's all that I can say for this section!
Bonus: 3/5
*Requesting Me
*Requesting @ Candy-Land
*Loving CE!
Total: 83/100
Good luck on the story! I'll be reading!
A Ride Of A Lifetime
By: iloveDBSK
Reviewed by: Ice- San
Grading
Title: 5/5
Truthfully, it was a weird title. But it did suit your story. Though, it was kinda predictable.
Poster/Background: 8/10
The poster is supposed to be the Love Wheel. In my opinion, the poster could have more glitter…like a ferries wheel shining brightly during the night. The background was kinda plain, it should have had more glitter too.
Forewords: 8/10
Not much of a forewords. You prologue was interesting though.
Plot: 13/15
Simple and very imaginable. Very cute!!
Creativity/Originality: 8/10
Taiwan dramas have around the same kind of plot!!
Flow: 9/10
The language was used very well. Though, it was just a one-shot. You manage to flow the story really well.
Spelling/Grammar/Vocabulary: 9 /10
You forewords had a few spelling errors..your introduction I mean. Otherwise, everything looks great!!
Characterization: 6/10
Your characters weren’t quite interesting. There weren’t names of the characters so I had only been able to comment on the feeling you tried to bring out from the characters.
Writing Style: 10/10
I liked how you wrote your story.cool!
Overall Enjoyment: 5/5
Bonus: 5/5
Your story was good overall!!!!
Total: 86/100
